Ooh, such a good chapter! I loved the royalty of Shonagan contrasted against Baronis'. He's such a good character. Power to the servants!

'Did you think? Oh, I believe you thought, but not with your brain.' This line is such a classic. Lovely.

More please!

Yay! Nice chapter! That Kelath is such an utter bastard. Again, wonderfully well-written, an engaging story with superb characters.

Keep writing!

What a wonderful beginning! You've introduced the storyline and characters well, but without too much description for people to slog through, and it's very well written - no glaring punctuation or spelling errors that so often mar this sort of work.

A strong beginning to what promises to be a wonderful story.