that is so sad, i guess that's kinda a understatement. but you did a good job writing it.

you totally need a sequel for this who's this song by?

wow this was powerful. a little scary..i like the fact that the kid got rescued at the end. kind of inspiring. good job!!

so sad.. You are an amazing writer!

This was really sad and beautiful. You describe things very very well. Thank you for writing this,

your obedient servant,
G.I.A.M.P

This was a very well written story. I liked how the descriptive imagery really gave the reader an full image. I have a couple of questions that aren't really able to be inferred from the text such as "Do they live in an apartment?" or "Did the main character die?" It is okay to leave the reader with a couple of questions but never too many that the story doesn't make sense.

this was so good! but you kept putting her in some of the sentences. it was more meaningful in 1st person point of view, it showed alot more emotion, but i got a question. did the girl live or die? it ends in song wich i do like, but i want to know if she lived or died. yeah i could use my imaganation like she died on the way to the hospital, or she lived and the father was arrested for attmepted murder and the girl was adopted or something but sometimes i want a complete ending.
but yeah it was good, just please answer my question.