Splendiferously Tiggerific! I haven't really read Romeo and Juliet, but I basically know the story and my mom says it's stupid. Which it is. But you're version isn't. So much easier to read too. It was great how Jake acted, and how Cloe was looking for something to kill herself at the end. LOL. Good work.

OMG! This story is so funny!
My favorite line is "I hate my life. I hate my life. I hate my life I- hold! Hott chick at twelve o' clock!"
That line made me laugh so hard!!
And I totally agree wih you about "Romeo and Juliet"! O mean, how can anyone fall in love like that in just 3 days!! I loved how you made it so simple! I practically killed my brain trying to understand Elizabeathen language... By the way, you kept on switching the cousin's name from "Ben" to "Bob", but I'm pretty sure other reviewers have alredy critcized on that...
This story is such a hilarious spoof! Keep writing!

OMFG! So hilarious!

I actually thought this was rather hilarious for a modern day take on a classic masterpiece. LOL Hehe. I think that Tatlush/MeiMei was taking the parody a bit too seriously, especially when the she/he started arrogantly saying *puts on her shrill immitating voice* "This will never be performed on the stage."

No duh, it's not like you were making this out to be a professionally written playwright *throws a banana at the evil critic* Oh well, what does the SHE/HE know??

What I would suggest about the names, and since this is a spoof, you should make the names in the play simillar to the actual characters in Romeo and Juliet. Examples would be: Juliet--Jewel Crapulat...Romeo-Lil' Romeo Montawho?...you know, make them really over the top. *amused grin*

WingChant

This is pretty funny. I have a couple of name issues though: Tybalt's name is Ben? That makes it a tad confusing, especially since Benvolio is not mentioned. Also, "Maria" is the name of the Juliet character in West Side Story, so...naming Rosaline that is kinda O.o. Unless you did that on purpose, in which case...that's actually a pretty creative reference ;)

All nitpicking aside, this was pretty good!

This is really funny! It is also pretty true that it does seem pretty rediculous when you are not thinking of it as a big romantic story! This is an awesome story Sarah!

Great job. It was really funny, but then everything you make me read or you act out usually is. A good recap of the story.

*humongous grin*
We just did Romeo and Juliet for our middle school play, so this has particular significance for me. I think you sum up the long, boring stuff very well, especially with the party scene and the last scene, to great comedic effect.

Also, I love this little note: "- And she means because her father hates his, not because he’s up there at her window making out with the guy’s daughter -"

A few minor spelling/typing things, but the dialogue is--at least where it's supposed to be--much more characteristic of actual teenagers than of adults who think they're "savvy" trying to write how they think teenagers talk, which usually comes out somewhere between close enough, hilariously exaggerated, downright insulting, and just completely off.

BTW--I was Capulet, so of course I loved this part: "- Back at Chloe’s house -

Mr. Sullivan: Chloe, guess what!

Chloe: Ooh! What?!

Mr. Sullivan: I have arranged for you to marry Thomas!

Chloe: No…!

Mr. Sullivan: Yes! Be happy. I just set you up with the richest man in our part of the world!

Chloe: But- NO!

Mr. Sullivan: You will obey me!

- Mr. Sullivan storms off in a huff without even asking his daughter why she will not marry the richest man in their part of the world. Mrs. Sullivan comes in to talk to Chloe -"

In summary...NICE!

--Jeff

ha! that was pretty funny! i think you may have changed the cousin's name from ben to bob half-way through the story though.

While I DID think that parts of "Romeo and Juliet" were ridiculous, I think this is just an overdone concept. I've encountered all of these jokes and "hahas", and it gets old. I didn't like the style that much (hott, no, strange caps in strange places, etc.), and some parts were a little TOO weird, even for anyone's taste. The play format just made it sillier. Let's face it - this will never be done on stage... Anyways, I do commend you for writing this (and reading "Romeo and Juliet", though I guess the fact that it's required reading...). I'm not a big fan, but I'm sure others will find this very amusing.

agree that it would be ridiculous in a real life situation, but in elizabethan times, it wasn't. Anywhay, it made me laugh.
Just one thing: did you spell 'hott' wrong deliberatly? it's spelt 'hot'