Dramatic beginning.

I like it.

Good luck with writing and this story.

Looking forward to more.

~Twilight Starr~

I'm really trying to undersand this. Metaphorical death? Suicide? Vicious trans verstite murderers? Hmm...very interesting.

This is kind-of short, and there were some grammar issues. Would like to see a longer beginning narrative once you know where this is headed.

i like this...a lot. it's very deep though i have no idea where this is going to go. i still enjoyed this piece, especially the vivid description and the flow of it.

This looks really deep and interesting. Nice way to start a story! I can't wait to see where you will go with this.