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| velle 2007-05-29 ch 2,  | abuseI liked the second bit more than I did the first chapter. Not exactly sure why...but it was still great nevertheless. :] Though the changing of timeline order and such got me a tad bit confused. :/ |
| abitterkiss. 2007-05-24 ch 1, | abuseCELESTE!! A NEW PIECE FROM YOU!! -HUGS- Things I noticed: [Tara and Evie had to admit, however, that making the trip for hen night...] Maybe you meant 'her', not 'hen'. Cluck, cluck. :) Graduation is still pretty far away for me, but man, I can imagine how it'd be. I'd be bawling my eyes out - because it is a big day, a sense of accomplishment, but it's also going to be sad because... everyone's leaving. As much as I want everyone to be with each other I know that we all have our own lives, and we have to leave to pursue them. (This is the same thing I want in my story, btw. You can read minds, dude). ['m sure I stood there gawking at him for nearly two whole minutes, as Alex looked more and more nervous by the second and he was starting to turn an interesting shade of green...] Hahaha, I loved that! And the last line was wonderful. Really, I'm not into extravagant displays of affection. Seriously, I love it when the simplest things show how much someone loves you. :) Great piece Celeste. Duh, it's from you. :) |