interesting and powerful haiku

I really like this. It's short and compact, but impactful. Good work!

you know, it's difficult to write such short verse, and not many people can pull it off. all I can say is:

brilliant.

it really is. I don't know, you left me with a feeling that you had said it all. it's amazing, I tell you.

Gyn

Excellent sound and flow for a haiku. I like how this spreads over the lines and continues rushing. Great haiku. MD:77.

Oh my, the rhyme in this is so effective and the haiku itself is almost morbid in a way that it's almost beautiful too.

wow, gorgeous flow...i love it. Haikus are hard to write but this one is perfect.I'm putting it on my favourites.

- lizzie