I liked this... I kinda expected it rhyme though.. lol... the format is great and I like the message... something everyone on fp can relate to

You have so much talent… I am jealous. I’m not kidding.

I definately like the concept behind this, and how you give the specifics to make the reader understand the totality of the point. I also like the creativeness of this. With the parentheticals and word seperations. Well done. MD:77.

Maybe rhyming is a defense mechancism, but I wouldn't be able to vouch for that because I've never been able to rhyme well. The form of this poem is so effective in getting the mood and the message across. Oh, and interesting name change there.

Just because it's been said before, doesn't mean it doesn't sound good.

That sentence sounds weird. I know.

I feel like the last lines aren't the end. Other than that I adore this poem.