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| WithoutException 2008-07-04 ch 7,  | abuseAw...where have you gone? This is really good! Please update... |
| Im. The. Angel. Of. Darknes... 2008-06-25 ch 7, | abuseloved it! |
| lala 2008-06-07 ch 7, anon. | abuseUm...helo why would you do that to a person? Ya left me hanging PLEASE finish like today I have to know what is gonna happen?? I love Seamus... |
| michelle 2008-04-09 ch 1, anon. | abusei look like addy lol |
| dangerous attraction 2008-03-23 ch 7, | abuseaghghghhgh... UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE! i NEED to know what happens!! update soon!! |
| Ivy Shane 2008-03-18 ch 1, | abuseSo i really completely fell in love with this story. I wish you would update soon, it's fantastic! |
| bwriterchik 2008-03-16 ch 7, | abuseokay, i have completely fallen inlove with this story-don't stop now! please |
| Andromeda Lyra 2007-12-28 ch 1, | abuseYeah, it's a bit of a cliché and that sets me off the plot a bit. But then, you acknowledged that it was a cliché, so I guess that's all right. Addy is the most overdone, though. It's funny when Addy kicked him in the shin! Take that! I can see some of this stuff happening and your characterization is superb. Except for the clichés, of course. The plot is also clichéd but I think you'll find some way to put a twist to it. If you don't, you'll have to work on it because there is no way it's possible to have a perfect life. Or always have a happily-ever-after ending. Anyway, I think this story has AWESOME potential(Let's be honest. Is there anything of yours that doesn't have at least that?)despite certain things as mentioned above. |
| Gen Eliz 2007-12-07 ch 7, | abuseWRITE MORE OR ELSE:) well now I'm off to the mall and then I'm going to the play at our school But I wanna like read everything Yeyeye!! |
| Gen Eliz 2007-12-07 ch 5, | abuse"typical teenage party" Wow well I guess I don't go to the right parties!! |
| Gen Eliz 2007-12-07 ch 4, | abuseLmao. Trying on something skanky. I've done that... |
| Gen Eliz 2007-12-07 ch 3, | abuseLIAM |
| Gen Eliz 2007-12-07 ch 2, | abuseMAGGIE You may not own LaSenza but I do ;) |
| Gen Eliz 2007-12-07 ch 1, | abuseMAGGIE:) I would totally like to meet Peter:P |
| victim of reality88 2007-09-09 ch 7, | abuseOkay so i just started reading this for the first time and i have to say i love the cliched plot and the characters. However there is one thing i have to be critical about. The only time i really feel like i can feel what Addy is feeling or really get into the story is when you write about or involve dialog of her and Seamus. Im not sure if that really makes sense but i just feel as though you put more thought or effort in writing about them then you do with the rest of the characters. It could just be me and you can completely ignore me. Im not trying to be rude or offend you because i really like the idea of this story and think u have a lot of potential as a writer, but the thing about great writers is that they can pull u into a story and make you feel like you are the character. I think you could do that. Anyways hope this helped a little, im not sure it really made much sense lol. PLEASE UPDATE SOON! |