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| Strangely Natural 2008-08-17 ch 26,   | Though this story is fun, and cute with lots of excitement and emotion (I'm glad we got to know Jacques, and that Jon and Trina got together, not to mention Andie and Martin) it is also rather preposterous, with too many inconsistencies and material from movies, but where else would a writer get inspiration from eh? Ch 22 and 24 were really good though. *"No one is leaving this building," Thelms's voice suddenly came coldly, causing Andie and Martin to jolt and turn to him abruptly. He smirked. "You know, if you two weren't so caught up in saying such sappy and ridiculous things to each other, then you might already be out of the building by now. Shame."* this was one of the smartest things said in the whole book. |
| S. Taylor 2008-04-21 ch 26, | WOW - this story packs a nice punch. I just couldn't stop reading it. I even skipped my 3 college classes today just to read this all in one day. I have never been on the edge of my seat for story on FP, like this. Good luck on your new conquers |
| haley! 2007-09-19 ch 18, | ok, my curiosity got the best of me and i went ahead and read the sex scene. that was REALLY well written. you sure ur a virgin? lol and i of course have read more than just the sexing. you are a wonderful writer! |
| Murphy's Lawyer 2007-09-06 ch 18, | AHAHAHA! FINALLY! :D Well written.. lucky buggers, both of 'em. Now we just beter hope no one heard them. :P |
| Murphy's Lawyer 2007-06-14 ch 16, | WHOO! Question?!?!? Uhoh... |
| Murphy's Lawyer 2007-06-14 ch 15, | YAY! UPDATE! She's gonna be okay! Kick Thelms's (Senior) **! |
| Murphy's Lawyer 2007-06-12 ch 14, | ** ** ** **! I'm sorry but I hate Thelms (Senior, of course). **! Pardon my French. ARGH! Anyways, still a very good chapter. Andie better be okay... *shifty eyes* - LL |
| Murphy's Lawyer 2007-06-12 ch 13, | WOW! About time she figured that out! HAHAHAHA! Now Martin's not the only one with an obsession. Here, have a brownie, just cause you rock. - LL |
| CarlyJo 2007-06-11 ch 1, | Sounds good so far! |
| Murphy's Lawyer 2007-06-11 ch 12, | AH! UPDATE! - LL |
| Natasha 2007-06-11 ch 1, | nice job!! keep it up. i have to read the rest of it later. but i can't wait. |
| Murphy's Lawyer 2007-06-08 ch 8, | WOW. - LL |