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Marshie 2007-06-30 ch 4, anon.	abuseYep, there are still errors here and there. I'm sure your next pass-through with the editing machine will work out those bugs. Interesting finish to this part of the story, though. Arella's initial acceptance of her position is well-done and the plot hook with Eddy realizing based on Sera's pretty eyes is nice. Well, on to the next one.
Marshie 2007-06-30 ch 3, anon.	abuseAnd so the plot thickens. I can't help but think that the decision to have Arella visit her home instead of getting on with her mission right away is going to come back and bite her in the **. As well. Boo on Heaven for not supplying furniture. They should have at least a minor expense report... I mean, come on!
Marshie 2007-06-30 ch 2, anon.	abuseGabriel is AWESOME. I like the way that the Archangels are basically God's prison **. All they really get is some nifty weapon, and in exchange they've got to deal with having a job, fighting crime on the side, and all without even being able to interact with their loved ones. Speaking personally, I'd probably have told 'em to shove it. But then again, there's no way MY soul is pure enough to qualify for this sort of position anyway.
Marshie 2007-06-30 ch 1, anon.	abuseInteresting premise. Like anything anyone writes, there were dropped words here and there but over all it's good. I like the premise, it's very interesting. Let's see where it goes.
11th Commandment 2007-06-27 ch 3,	abusestill liking this story. I like the way the angels are. :) Caught me off guard with the umbrella shop.
Mist In The Moonlight 2007-06-19 ch 1,	abusemouth hangs open I SO gotta read some more!
11th Commandment 2007-06-17 ch 1,	abuseOk, this chapter really surprised me by the time I got to the end! I wasn't expecting a continuation in heaven and the way you describe it is very interesting. The angel's hair, the corn, her not feeling pain... the confusion, the clock... creative! defiantly a good surprise!
Patricia Howitt 2007-06-16 ch 4, anon.	abuseHey great job. I really enjoyed the chapter. The fight scene was great. I really like the shuriken roses. I like the idea that noone could she them when they're wings are out. I wish I could fly. I never walk again. I'm happy everything worked out and you did a great job with this story :D I love it
James Eyeklll 2007-06-11 ch 3, anon.	abuseChapter 2 was... odd. Video games. Choosing your appearance. Heaven. Huh. Gabriel was fun, I liked all the characters we saw here. I liked the scenes with her back on Earth again too, it's hard not to feel for the poor girl being put in this impossible situation with it just getting worse and worse. Mal's really really creepy, you always seem to write the crazy creepy stuff like that well. You have some awesome cliffhangers every now and then too! Like this one. Please don't kill poor little Ed there ;_;
Patricia Howitt 2007-06-10 ch 3, anon.	abuseHey I'm back. Chapter three was awesome :D. Though I don't like how it ends :( I wanna know what happens. I hope she gets there in time. I guess I'll just have to wait :(. Poor Sera having to see her old life and know she can't go back. I'm glad she decides to go after her mission, though I hope its not to late. Damn you for ending it there Gr. Grat story hope to see more soon.
calyx 2007-06-10 ch 3, anon.	abuseI want to be Lito... can i? haha But yeah, this one's a tad choppy, but you said it's not edited yet, so I guess I can forgive you for now =P God the guy's totally creepy and I wish I could hide from him... just imagining a dude with crazed eyes staring at me... shivers Poor eddy, he's so little and so defenseless it seems. haha Sera better get into shape soon!
calyx 2007-06-10 ch 2, anon.	abuseoh I want to tinker around on a computer to make me look different! That'd be so kick **. And the flying part, I loved it, made me wish I could fly around and be happy too. Getting all the emotions back made me cringe... I can imagine it being so heartbreaking to get them all back after feeling absolutely nothing. Out of curiosity... at the top, the italics/definitions of love... is it supposed to be squash? and not quash? just asking.
Sheharzad 2007-06-10 ch 3, anon.	abuseAwesome. i'm loving the characters so far. Especially the angel girl. I think she should have super powers like a button on her chest. When she presses it, god comes down to help.
Sheharzad A 2007-06-10 ch 1, anon.	abuseWow this was really an awesome story. Started off slow but became really very interesting. Is she gonna have super angel powers? Tune in next week to find out.
calyx 2007-06-08 ch 1, anon.	abusegrumbles still annoyed that my last review didn't come through, so this one might not be as detailed, since my brain's shot and I can't exactly remember what I said last time. But like we discussed on msn, I remember saying how much like Harry Potter, Eddy is. I mean, black, unruly hair, green eyes and glasses? Definitely the same description I'd give Harry, and yes, he is emo =P. So I guess that worked out well in the end. Ok, writing wise, I really do like it. Not just cause I'm your friend and all, but from reader's point of view. It's got a nice flow to it, and the transactions aren't jerky from one part of the story to another. And you've definitely got me hooked! I'm all for angels and whatnot. My other friend's so into angels, you're both dragging me down with you =P

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