 LiberryBooked 2007-05-26 . chapter 1I like the way that you spaced the poem as a whole. The lines (that put up with all my condescension, my lying) becomes so much better my the spacing. But I don't think that the last line ends the poem appropriately. I thought I misread it, and that it was suppose to read I miss you, love, or I miss you, my love. I think that it needs a bit more closure, but other than that it is good. |