Reviews for She Thinks of Him

Brackynn
2007-06-29
ch 1,

I'm not a fan of writing poetry, either. We had to write some for our Lit class, and mine were absolutely horrible ... they got shoved in a file and will probably never see the light of day ;)

But you seriously need to retract that "I'm not that wonderful" statement of yours -- I loved the emotions that you evoked in this piece! You've created the perfect tone for the subject matter and there are so many beautiful lines. I really like the image of "leaden sorrow" :)

My only suggestion would be to watch out for the odd rhyming couplet ... as this is free verse, I'm sure that they're unintentional, but the first two lines of the third stanza kind of threw me a bit because of the rhyme. Not a big deal, just my opinion.

Awesome job!

Faith Adeline
2007-05-27
ch 1,

I liked this :) It was good and very real. Keep it up :) I'll have to check out the story :)
Faith

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