"Lucky Hell"... interesting phrase. I like this, particularly the shift to using "I" at the end. It is slightly confusing, but I think I get it basically... and the form and diction is nice. Good job!

Good

I'm reviewing this mostly because no one else did. And I like being the only review sometimes.

The reason I think that no one reviewed this is because you hide the meaning too much. There is no definate "you" or "I". We see your obvious awe of this person and moment. It seems almost religious, but the "general" categories you put it into is decieving. Some of it also just doesn't feel right. Like you forced the words into place instead of let it flow.

That being said I still enjoyed it. There was a good amount of feeling in it and the ending was very nice. Please don't be offended by what I said, it's just my opinion. I really did like it though. Keep up the great work.

Ashelin