The only thing wrong was that it was way too short lol. Work on getting longer chapters :) Don't worry, I do it too.
Faith

Okay first oh all I would like to say Hooja I am your top reviewer >: and always will be, I like this chapter, but it was rather short, and all but I would love for another one real soon make it a bit longer then this and come out fly out with the discription I know you can do it >:

Its rather good, but i did see an error, although I don't see why I should talk since I am not so great either x.x...Anyway It's true that she would do anything for her love, but keeping him alive, andwatching her be forced would be alot worse then death, this is an interesting story,I like the discription I only wish it could be longer, and tell a little more about each person well not to much but you never know ^-^

I like this. But I think if Nichole really loved Stephen, she'd do anything to save him. Even agree to be with Louis. Because it would be easier to have him alive than dead. But, maybe that's just me. Just a thought for you to play around with. Other than that, it's very good.