Hilarious, and very creative!

This has me giddy, it's so good. I feel like I'm spying on two people at a grocery store because this is so completely realistic. I love it! :D

LOL! This story is amazing. I love how there's only dialogue. That's great!

THAT, was SO cute! awesome job!

That was just great!! no additional comments required.

they are so immature

That's cute. But it's mostly dialouge, but still. You can see all the emotions and such.

loved it!
got a tinsy bit confused who was talking at times, but IT WAS GREAT!
well done xD

Hi,
Wow. LOL. I really loved reading this. It made me laugh the whole way through and it was just what I needed at 2 AM in the morning. I'm glad I decided to check out your work. This is especially humorous. Thanks so much for reading my story and reviewing...and adding it to your favorites list :D You have no idea how you've just made my day.

Cheers
Blue Calico

aw! This was the most random, adorable, and utterly perfect one-shot I've ever read! It had me laughing and swooning. Cools!

OMGG! I loved that! :DD

Too sweet, my friend. I'm not usually one for complete-dialogue-ness...but this was just awesome. I loved how you were able to tell what was going on, even if there were no real descriptions. [“Um…You can let go of my hand now.”] Like that. Hehehe.

[“Could an associate please report to aisle four? There’s a spill in aisle four. Cleanup on aisle four.”

“Who knew cans of Spaghetti-Os could roll that fast? Did you know they could roll that fast, Daniel?”

“Nope. Maybe the floor is slanted. You know, the leaning Tower of Albertson’s.”] Sorry to quote such a huge chunk, but THAT WAS AWESOME. I seriously l-o-v-e-d those lines. Classic. Brilliant. Hilarious. I could totally imagine myself doing that with my brothers. :DD Hmm...I wonder who caused that mess on aisle 4? :P

Kay, so I really liked this. Duh. Really well-written and awesomely original.

SPIDERMAN 3 WAS AMAZING. Like this story. :DD

Keep writing! (And thanks for the reviews..hehe. :))

Definitely a fav.

;)becky

Ok.

That was just really really really...cute.

I loved it.

The plain dialogue never usually works, but I think that is what made this story so funny.

Annyyway.

I loved it (once again)

No, no, no. You've got the bologna song all wrong.
It goes my BOLOGNA has a first name: It's O-S-C-A-R
My BOLOGNA has a second name: It's M-E-Y-E-R
I ME to eat IT every day and if you ask me why I'll say
'Cause Oscar Meyer has a way with B-O-L-O-G-N-A

I thought if you could get the end of the song right you'd be able to spell bologna.

I thought wrong.

wow i didnt know all dialogue would be so good but i thought your story was really cute lol
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I LOVED THIS! It was adorable and random and hilarious - all things a good story should be, if you ask me.

Wonderful job! I liked the all-dialogue format, too.