I like this. It moves, it speaks, it shows its reason. And yet, it can not be debated. Nice job.

Hmm. It's got a good concept, but turned out a little choppy. It's missing the rhythm a good poem should have. But it's pretty good for a first try, poetry is hard to do.

Nice. My favorite lines are the last three. Overall I think the poem's a bit choppy, but if you really don't want to change it leaving it as is would be fine.

this confusing me a bit, mostly the last two lines. Overall this is a good poem, nice job!