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| i.rock.the.sousa 2008-03-05 ch 1,   | Surprisingly, even though I have a limited vocabulary and didn't understand a few words, I understood the idea behind this piece. I think the dark [a little] theme and the accuracy behind it makes you think about your life and how much you want to deny that you're living this way. But the more you think about it, the more you realize it's dead on. Your inbox should be happy. =] *laughs out loud, in literal* |
| Zigeunerin 2007-05-31 ch 1, | Always thoughtful, aren't you? Oh yes, switch the stanzas around--it conveys more feeling, after all. Well I guess you were successful in that. It was good, but not my style. That seems our dilemma. |
| The Reverse Edge Blade 2007-05-29 ch 1, | Your ending rhymes are nice! Keep that up, it's great! Maybe you could have shortened the sentences a little bit? I liked how you wrote about life! You had really reflective words there! Great job! The Reverse Edge Blade |