Wow. Were to planning to continue? You should.

I like your story, but I like the prologue better than the first chapter. Chapter 1 is about a completely different person than the prologue. It's a little confusing.

This is a very interesting story, however, you do have alot of spelling mistakes. If you re-read your work you should be able to catch them, if not you should find a beta. Oh, and I have the same birthday as you, just not the same year. Keep up the good work and update soon!

An update! I like this chapter almost as much as the prologue. You seem to have a knack for believable characters and dialogue, and I love all of the little details; they make the story more real.

As for the actual content of the chapter...very grim. Interesting, but grim. I can't wait to see how it develops.

You are truly an incredible writer. I loved everything about this. It was interesting, it was beautifully written, and the style was impeccable.

I particularly loved the end, when he's beating the girl with the belt - not because I'm a sadist, haha, but because you described it so well that I could actually picture it.

This was fantastic. Good for you. I'll definitely be back for more.

Cheers,
Sammy

Good chapter. It gives a glimpse into your character's background.

So does she go on to get revenge against her father because the policeman planted it there?

Please update soon.

~Twilight Starr~

Good, well written prolouge. I feel sorry for your main character.

~Twilight Starr~

i like how the the writing styles switched. in the first one, Tory sounds like a bonafidde Southern-belle, while this chapter is more subdued. wicked chapter! XD

Wow . . . Olisa Whitefield seems like a clever child...with some twisted intentions lacing around her mind. Like it!

Wow...this is truly a story of cruelty and the darker side of religious conviction. It reminds me somewhat of the antagonist in Chocolat, or the preacher in The Poisonwood Bible. I really liked the voice that you used for this story; it fit the main character well. The characters are frightening, but believable, and your description and imagery was very strong.

Great work! I would like to ask why the whole thing is in italics, though.

Wow, really lovely. I hate leaving pointless reviews, but that was just fabulous.

A few minor points:

As a general rule, don't say 'you' in writing, not even in first person.

When I awoke, it was dark and it seemed a fire burned in me
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You don't have to use 'seemed' here, it only weakens the sentence.


Yeah, that's all I can think of. Great job.

Feather La

The category "angst" for this places it too shallow. That description is too light. Simply this chapter, this start, is too powerful for such a thin nutshell.
Obviously, if you couldn't tell, I liked it. Who could do otherwise? Starting it off so captivatingly will have me on the watch for the chapters to come, to the end.

*claps* Wonderful, wonderful prologue. Darkly descriptive. I can't wait to read more.

This is really good! I love the descriptions and word choice as well as the characters and the emotions conveyed. I hope to be reading more!
-Raico

I like the quiet imaegry in this work. It has a certain South-ern quality to it. Thiss was a beauitful job.