I have to agree with one of your other reviewers, it is nonsensical a bit perhaps, but it does provoke deep thought, and many of the verses ring true when taken in pairs or by themselves.

Very good, though you say its not got a deep meaning it provokes deep thought :P which for one such as myself is quite a feat

I'm glad that you added the note about it being nonsensical, becasue I did like it, but ti didn't make much sense overall. lol Althought I really liked the way you used the last word of the previous line as the first word of the next line. it created a very nice rhythm.