Aww! this made me all teary-eyed.

I LOVE Madina Lake. I've seen them twice, and I'm gonna see them a third time at this year's Bamboozle festival. :D

Here are the only things I really saw wrong:

"Running up to him, he stood up and grabbed her in a hug, at just the same time she reached for him."

This should really be written as "She ran up to him; he stood up and grabbed her in a hug, at just the same time she reached for him." Or something of the sort. The way you have it written, it makes it sound like he was the one running.

Also, I think you left a word out or something in "I could exactly what I was looking for, in you." Just thought I'd point that out. :)

But good work! It really got to me. Kind of makes me think of my relationship... sometimes I feel like I want out, and the moment I start to think about it I realize how much I need him.

OMG!
This is so good!!
I really like this!! Aww it was just soo sweet!!
And I like the way you write!!
:D
good work!!

omg

that was cute

(And i understand it now cause im not high on advil)

adorable

wrtie more or i kill you :)

Beautiful. I loved it. Keep it up!