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rouquinamour 2007-07-17 ch 18,	abuseYou perfected "us", characterization-wise, and again with the great rodeo knowledge. you and karl are so heartbreaking!
rouquinamour 2007-07-16 ch 17,	abuseyay!! we're married, we're married!! sorry, had to get that over with... "I Never" is pretty cool, and so is the whole tailgating thing. PLEASE let's do this when we're older...! never have i ever dated a younger man I hope to be drinking to that, eventually... aww, why does Karl have to be some emotionally insecure about his life? he's definately got 2 distinct parts to his personality... very powerful chapter...
rouquinamour 2007-07-16 ch 16,	abuseHaha, JACK!! Hard decisions, hard decisions... you have to choose Karl!!
rouquinamour 2007-07-16 ch 15,	abuseI like the shopping... you characterize everyone so well! I don't know if I'd wear a metallic silver bathing suit though... but, hey, maybe it'll be "in" in 10 years... =] Can't wait for Karl to ride!
rouquinamour 2007-07-16 ch 14,	abuseI love this - the beginning is SO CUTE, them getting comfortable together... Yay! Me and Charlie are comin' to paint the town red!
rouquinamour 2007-07-16 ch 13,	abuseI forgot about this... the party, and Skip attacking Rita.. Wow! I love traveling when it rains... you know how to set up a scene!
rouquinamour 2007-07-14 ch 11,	abusewow. very powerful... you express your great knowledge of rodeo in the beginning with all the terms, and then give GREAT comic relief with the little things that they fought about, like the salsa and undressing. then... wow, the kiss was powerful :) sort of heartbreaking how she handles it, though...
rouquinamour 2007-07-14 ch 10,	abuseaww, very interesting. It's hard to understand why you cried so much. I know you were worried about him, but unless you had an emotional trigger to cause you to freak out that much (like your best friend had died from a drug overdose or something), then I don't see how it was justified. greatly written - i like the incorporation of the song!
rouquinamour 2007-07-14 ch 9,	abusea very scary, but powerful, chapter. again, i hate the name Karl... I'd like something more Southern. Otherwise, this chapter was written beautifully - it's very vivid :)
rouquinamour 2007-06-22 ch 8,	abuseaw... the thing with alex comes on very suddenly... there should be a little more of a transition. or maybe he would be drunk. i don't think there is enough trust for him to spill his biggest secret to someone he hasn't seen in years... poor alex :(
rouquinamour 2007-06-22 ch 7,	abusedamn it! alex should have won!! again, the vocabulary and great imagery brings the reader into the stadium... you can see everything!
rouquinamour 2007-06-22 ch 6,	abuselighted ice cubes?? haha... raise goats... A "Ringer" and a "Rider"... how appropriate :) so sweet :)
rouquinamour 2007-06-22 ch 5,	abusegreat! so romantic! the vocabulary you used to describe the horses (and the reference to Keane) is amazing! it lets the reader know you TOTALLY know your stuff... amazing story!
rouquinamour 2007-06-22 ch 4,	abuseI love how believable it is! Your writing is amazing... Karl's cool, but a) he has the first name of our principal and b) I like his old name better. just because... have you ever heard of a hot "Karl?" Or a southern "Karl"? "Karl" isn't really a rugged, bull-rider name...
Asia Ralaia Schiegoh 2007-06-04 ch 2,	abuseWhy did this song just pop up in my head AGAIN!?!?!?!? Oh, but it's so fitting! Kinda. I mean, she knew Karl's name, obviously, but she doesn't exactly recall verbatim just how he is... Maybe I should start that over. Oh, by the way, here're the lyrics to this beautiful song. It's R&B, not hiphop, so you'll be safe listening to it (smirk). Smooth and instrumental. The words all by themselves are lovely enough! ~ARS ALICIA KEYS LYRICS "You Don't Know My Name" Baby, baby, baby From the day I saw you I really really want to catch your eye There's something special 'bout you I must really like you Cause not a lotta guys are worth my time O baby, baby, baby It's gettin kind of crazy Cause you are takin over my mind And it feels like o But you don't know my name And I swear it feels like o o o o You don't know my name (round and round and round we go, will you ever know) Oh baby baby baby I see us on our first date You're doin everything that makes me smile And when we had our first kiss It happened on a Thursday O it set my soul on fire O baby baby baby I can't wait for the first time My imagination's runnin wild It feels like o You don't know my name And I swear it baby, it feels like o o o o You don't know my name (round and round and round we go, will you ever know) "I'm sayin, he don't even know what he's doin' to me Got me feelin' all crazy inside I'm feelin like" Ow! O O Doin more than I've ever done for anyone's attention Take notice of what's in front of you Cause did I mention you're 'bout to miss a good thing And you'll never know how good it feels to have all of my affection And you'll never get a chance to experience my lovin' Cause my lovin' feels like o You don't know my name (round and round and round we go, will you ever know And I swear it feels like o o o o You don't know my name (round and round and round we go, will you ever know) Oh Will you ever know it, no no no no no Will you ever know it? "I'm gonna have to just go ahead and call this boy. Hello? Can I speak to -- to Michael? Oh hey, how you doin? Uh, I feel kinda silly doin' this, But um, this is the waitress from the coffee house on 39th and Lennox You know, the one with the braids? Yeah, well I see you on Wednesdays all the time You come in every Wednesday on your lunch break, I think And you always order the special, with the hot chocolate And my manager be tripping and stuff Talking bout we gotta use water But I always use some milk and cream for you Cause I think you're kinda sweet. Anyway you always got on some fly blue suit 'n your cufflinks are shining all bright So, whatchu do? Oh, word? Yeah, that's interesting Look man, I mean I don't wanna waste your time but I know girls don't usually do this, But I was wondering if maybe we could get together Outside the restaurant one day Cause I do look a lot different outside my work clothes I mean we could just go across the street to the park right here Wait, hold up, my cell phone's breakin up, hold up Can you hear me now? Yeah So, what day did you say? Oh yeah, Thursday's perfect, man:." And it feels like o You don't know my name (round and round and round we go, will you ever know) Baby Baby I swear it's like o You don't know my name, no no no (round and round and round we go, will you ever know) And it feels like o You don't know my name (round and round and round we go, will you ever know) And I swear on my mother and father it feels like O o o o o o O o o o o o O o o o o o You don't know my name (round and round and round we go, will you ever know?)

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