There were a couple kinks in there [one was already pointed out] and it's simplistic rhythm got to me and I really liked it.

_Kari

Simple, yet beautiful. Great job - as always.

Rowan.

this is cute, juvenile in a refresing kind of way. i'm sorry i didn't get to your page sooner, i've been kind of slack about that lately. but i'm glad i found your work. ]

"We know not why we do say them"-This line is worded really badly. Try to fix it up so it flows smoother. I had to read it about three times before I knew what it said.

"We say these some things"-Take 'some' out.

It's a good poem overall. Just a couple of mistakes. I liked the third stanza the most ('I've tried to love every brother')-I felt a lot of heart in it.

Pretty good poem with a good message.

SirScott

Oh, that was beautiful...

This is really good. It has a simple rhyme that delivers a message. Great job and keep writing!