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| Xenn.be.Twisted 2008-08-13 ch 8,   | It's great! Please, write more. |
| The Prettiest Banana 2007-10-16 ch 8, | DARLING. you are full of surprises. I adore it. I love it. I want it to have my babies. Even if everytime I see the word Mia I giggle & picture my Mia with her dress tied up...um. Yeah. Well. Anyway. It's wonderul and you MUST update soon because otherwise I will come to your house and attempt to hurt you but really you'll end up hurting me so then I'll start tickling you and it'll turn into a big messy ticklefight like it always does and then your mum will walk in and it will be awkward. *cough* Ahhyeah. Ignore my weirdness. I'm in writer's workshop. Bored out of my mind. SAVE MEE. Anyway, I LOVE YOU. & THIS STORY. MORE THAN GOD LOVES SEX BEFORE MARRIAGE. WHICH IS LOTS AND LOTS. x |
| LozzaXxXT 2007-10-11 ch 8, | I think your story is great, I'd feel a bit used if i was Tobi though :[ Can't wait for you next chapter. |
| ihrtbks 2007-10-07 ch 8, | Mia didn't really come as that much of a surprise to me. Sky's reaction sort of foreshadowed it a lot. Please go a little slower; it's starting to become rushed. What does 'firsts' mean? Is it supposed to be like the best team or something? UPDATE SOON! |
| bekahlu 2007-10-06 ch 8, | oh wow! I really like this story! I love stories abtou girls being athletes and all! It is great so far! I like Tobi's personality, and her humor! Aw. Shae is such a sweetie, hes like the peacekeeper! please write more! |
| UnknownHypocrite 2007-10-05 ch 8, | Awesome story. Really well written. Please write more often. |
| Fleeting Moment 2007-10-05 ch 8, | AWSOME! UPDATE! |
| Fleeting Moment 2007-10-05 ch 7, | Whos Mia? UPDATE! |
| The Prettiest Banana 2007-08-25 ch 6, | Well, what was that you were saying today about not being able to get from where you are to the good bits? I'd call this a pretty damn good bit! Wonderful job Squeedz, keep it up [[ew]] I'm working on I Heart Ferris... Keep typing. =] Much love, xx |
| FictionRose 2007-08-23 ch 6, | Hah. Tobi is funny! I'm looking forward to the next chapter, good luck! |
| Fleeting Moment 2007-08-22 ch 6, | This is going to be hilarious! UPDATE! |
| ihrtbks 2007-08-22 ch 6, | Oh snap! Um...what's a crop top? But the coach should swap for them; I mean he wouldn't make the guys take off their shorts, would he? Tobi's a bastard, so she's disinclined to trust guys, very interesting. UPDATE SOON! |
| love to sleep 2007-08-22 ch 6, | i love it when sports is part of the story like it is here! i love soccer and so it's really great to see it like this. good job. |
| Kimberli Kitten 2007-07-04 ch 5, | Sorry. I don't know how ling ago you posted this, but good job! I wish I could have read it sooner. |
| The Prettiest Banana 2007-07-03 ch 5, | This chapter wasn't my favourite, but I still adore the story line and characters. The ending was awesome, too. Keep writing darlingg... xx |