Aw i love it :D I think it focused on her family a lot, thats not a bad thing but it felt like Lucas and Riley fell in love like over night. It was too quick for me. I really liked it though! Id like a sequel ;D

Nice beginning! I look forward to more :)

aww, poor lucas...anyways i love it...YOU ROCK

I'm reading some of your stories because the first one I read amazed me so much. You're really talented! So, if you do a sequel, I'll definitly read it, I think a mixture of both, her dad beats her and her brother (same problem Lucas had) they call child services, or, her dad gets the same problem, she DOES become a cutter, Lucas finds out... and you plan the rest. Happy writing and reading!

-christina

erm..y did lucas just disappear during the hospital thing?

like mid way

can i try give some suggestions?

maybe lucas can go hold Riley's hand and stay with her during the hospital visit, kiss her temple wtva

cuz he doesn't have a family to return to anyways

so he can be there for her 24/7

i love the story!]]

keep writing!

inform me of updates!

TIff

Sequel, Sequel Sequel(:

And I like Idea C.

A mix of both.

Fun fun(:

Keep on writting!

-Alexa Jayy

What the fuck is a dadent?

for the sequel i thnk u should write about her father becoming an alcoholic! i really! like this story

Truthfully, it seems really messy. It's interesting and I definitely want to keep reading but the grammar and the way you organized the story is a bit odd and disoriented.

Hey! Congratulations on your TiRO nomination!

I just wanted to let you know that I read this story! Unfortunately, I'm not giving you anything else except that because I want to remain completely neutral in this "review" that isn't actually a review proper.

I'm judging Best Drama/Angst for the TiRO awards this round, and your story has now been read as part of my duties as the judge. Winners won't be announced until January or whatever, so hang tight.

for the sequal i think you should do c

prequal, i dont know but it might be kind of interesting to read

Wow...love how this start!

good concept, but you too way too much telling and not enough showing. don't rush your chapters and feel free to dwell on feelings that your characters are having.

This was really good...I gotta go to bed now, but I'll read more tomorrow. :]

for the sequel -if you haven't already started it, i haven't looked- I think it should only be that riley starts cutting. i love the story completely, and I know that it doesn't have perfect details but I still picture them all and understand what's going on. this has inspired me to write a new story of my own, but completely different. the only thing I really want to use is the abusive parent. i'm checking your page now!