Poor Bailey... And Riley, and Robert... This is so tragic! I really, REALLY hope Bailey doesn't die. And thank you for the happy moment! Everything's been so dramatic, we needed that! So thanks ;)

Just one more thing: the word "dadent" appears twice in the text... don't you mean "moment"?

Anyways, update soon!

Barbara

uwah...so freaken DEPRESSING! almost made me cry '[

Aww how sweet. She's telling her she loves him while her brother's dying. Tragic. Very tragic.

One thing I really liked was the decieving title. The kisses part suggested that it was going to end with Bailey being okay and everything would be perfect and happy, but it didn't. That's actually kind of cool that you did that. Very decieving.

Two things that majorly bugged me about this was firstly, you kept writing 'dadent'. You meant 'moment', didn't you? I'm not going to say anything other than that on that topic, because I feel that no comment should be made on that. The other thing was tiny. You kept calling Robert 'her' and kept calling Riley 'him'. Please get your pronouns right.

Wow. Awesome details on the medical part (temperal lobe, coma stuff, etc.). Katie likes that very much. A very awesome part.

Bailey better survive!

Great story so far.(

I'm gonna keep my fingers crossed too! Bailey better make it... or else. *very frightening look*

I'm kidding. I don't look frightening at all. But please don't let Bailey die! Or in a coma for a very long time. Even if he can't walk (I don't have my hopes up on that one).

Update soon!

Barbara

you can't have Bailey die, that would just be awful :( but, still, good chapter; could use some work, but really good. update soon!

so sad! i really really really hope he'll be okay T_T i dont know if i'll be take him dying *_*... update soon!

aw poor bailey! omg! m one thing, though: try playing over the crash in your mind and then write that out on paper. try to work in a description of the car and exactly how bailey was lying on the ground. it might give us a better picture of exactly what happened. great job!

with love,

Susannah Simon

bailey has to live! on the bright side all of this has brought the family closer together... well i tryed to find something happy

i just started loving my spine.

OMG! I love this story! It's so dramatic that I just have to keep reading! Keep writing! Update soon because I must read! lol

write life

Aw I was so close to tears when I read that!

Oh no! Poor Bailey! I can't believe he can actually die! Everything's getting really messed up for them... at least Riley and Bailey's dad understood. Jake shouldn't be held responsible though... it was an accident, right?

Anyways, sorry for not reviewing the other chapters. I've had tests this whole week, and I haven't had the time to do anything. Again, sorry!

I can't wait to find out what happens next! Please update soon!

Barbara

don't kill Bailey! good chapter although I think you switch point of views a couple of times. Other than that, great job!

da writing at da start was a bit confusing because it was in third person, but i cant wait to find out wat happens next!

btw, y isnt da otha guy (the one coming toward them in chap. 14) in trouble?