Reviews for Strange Creatures

Kenna-Kat11
2007-06-04
ch 1,

hey, this was very good , but your friend is right the description for Niatruc was a little confusing. The only really confusing sentence was the one that read "Instead, the fur part of feather fur chest dominated his legs with short wisps of hair knotted together to form a thick pelt." Other than that the story was very good...you can get sucked into it easily...i hope you put the rest up !

~E~

HiddenBehindTheMask
2007-06-01
ch 1,

I agree with your friend, it is a little confusing. The description of the face and arms is fine, as far as I can tell, but when it gets to the torso and legs, you lost me. I mean, I can understand that it has the body of an eagle, with the hind legs of a cheetah (without spots, of course).

I think it's this part that's losing me: "Instead, the fur part of feather fur chest dominated his legs with short wisps of hair knotted together to form a thick pelt."

Other than that, especially considering it is only an excerpt, it's good, easy to read and understand.

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