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The Reverse Edge Blade 2007-06-03 . chapter 1
This wasn't one of your best ones. There wasn't much happening in it, just two people talking, except that what they talked about had alot in it. I think this fic could've been longer, with more stuff happening in it, not just the talking.
I liked the way you wrote it, but it should've been a little more things happening. Like her thoughts after he's left or something.
Keep writing!
The Reverse Edge Blade
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