I liked the title of this poem, it was really catchy. I liked how you captured the human experience of longing for something you can't have.

SirScott

great poem

it reminds me of where i was before i rededicated my life to Christ

thanks for the review ]

i actually went back to the poem a couple of days ago and tried to make it longer, but nothing really fit

i worked off of it, but it just wasn't the same to me

in real life i didn't dwell too much on why he was looking at me, so a long poem didn't really work