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| hey maria 2007-06-07 ch 1,   | I think there were some parts that were very nice, but others that were a little bland in comparison. I liked the second and third verses. You should definitely add more, though. |
| -MyInspiration- 2007-06-02 ch 1, | The two middle verses were... amazing. the rest -- quite forgettable. but work on it, it has potential. |
| Taylor Michaels 2007-06-02 ch 1, | This was good. I think that you should add more verses to it. Are you trying to make it rhyme? If so, i think the song would flow better if you made every line rhyme, not just a few of them. Good work here! |