First of I just want to say that I love the idea of a letter story and I think that you two are executing it wonderfully! At first I was skeptical about how the story would unfold, but I like where it is going a lot.

One thing that I would like to see is some more background info on Elin and Isabel's parents and the magical order. It's kind of cool how we get to find out a little bit more about it as the letters are written, but I'm just so impatient and I want to find out more!

Also, I really like both your styles of writing. They compliment each other nicely.

Well, that's all I have to say. I can't really think of anything for you to improve on, just keep doing what you're doing. I'm a fan and I can't wait for more letters!!

Okay, more constructive critism...

First Paragraph,"It seems as if it as," The second as should be has.

Third Paragraph,"Along side of being my older sister, Sofia has also become a wonderful friend," I don't really know what this is suppose to say, but I think it's somewhere along the lines of, "Along beside me is my older sister, Sofia...," Maybe? If not, you may want to re-word it.

Ninth Paragraph, "and possibly even know which the salad fork is," I believe know is suppose to be knowing.

These are the only mistakes I found. The story is coming along nicely. I'm waiting to find out what happen nexts and hopefully a story unfolds.

ANyways, bye bye! :)

Hello there,
I use to write letter stories all the time, but they were never finished...

Anyways, I noticed one thing wrong and another one may be wrong, but I cannot tell...

"I know He means", He needs a lower case "h".

And the maybe one:

"Well, some (all) would argue the house is more of a beautiful old mansion, placed magnificent seclusion with its lake, woods, and meadows."

I just don't understand it. I know what you mean, but I think it needs to be re-worded.

So, that's all I found. Besides that it's off to a fabulous start considering it's mainly made up on the top of your head. I mean, so far, your friend's, Hannah's, head.

I always appreciate constructive critism, so I thought I'd give it to you. :) Hope you like it too. If there is anything you want to say, just reply to this. :)

hmm I wanted to edit that letter a bit more, i wasn't sure if i wanted her a spy yet. oh well, ill make it work! You need to write the next letter

The first letter is so short! It didn't seem that short in the email

Yay! Our story!! Fun times!