wait ur first chapter.. is he in a comma yet? or no. good story so far

Interesting set up! I like the scenerio so far: school's ended, university's getting started, and everybody starts to go their separate ways. And if that's not enough of a shake up, the boyfriend has amnesia. There's definitely a lot you can do with that, and so far the characters are likeable. I'm excited to see what happens to Jen and company. ;]

Just from the glimpse of 'ENTER' in your prologue, I knew you were from Melbourne. LOL. I felt really comfortable reading through this chapter. Probably because it feels like an ordinary talk between my friends and myself. It's so Melbourne-ish that it's making me laugh. Even the slang 'teenyboppers,mole,bloody hell,**-whipped,VCE' fits into vocabulary I actually understand. I think I've been on this site too much reading american/english-based romances. Haha

And you've even got Flinders St. I literally cracked up about the whole setting too. My friend used to be manager there ;) LOL. Whenever I hear all this 'vce' stuff..I sort of feel regret. I did it last year, and did pretty ** because I was so slack.

Anyway, update when you can. I just checked your profile, so..good luck with your exams (you probably aced english) and your future ones this week. Don't slack (like me)! Haha. And remember to bring a un-labeled bottle of water! best be hydrated ;)

this story sounds so good!! please update. =]

i like where this is heading. update soon please

Oh wow. The prologue is so beautiful. It made me teary, and all I could do now is wait for Jen's story to unfold. Can't wait for the next chapters.
For now, I'll only have chapter one to hang on to.

Aww. Poor girl. And hey!, i understand everything thats going on!. Cause i live in melbourne. I love that .

hey, just wanted to let you know that this is an awesome story. the prologue really grabs the reader's attention and i'd like to see where this story is going! update soon!

meg

Ow!!

Viv! You better finish this story! I'm freaking hooked on it!! I will hassle you about updating this after you finish exams! And that's a promise!!

Beautifully written my dear!

I'm glad you haven't given up on writing--it's always a pleasure reading your stories sister dear!!

Good story so far. I like how you're setting it up so far; Jen thinks about her boyfriend's situation a lot but isn't letting it get in the way of her life. I like the balance.

Introducing Damien's character word of mouth was good, too. I like how it kind of keeps us guessing as to what he's really like.

Anyway, great start. Can't wait to read more!

Interesting so far. Does Charlie ever remember? And how did he lose his memory in the first place? Look forward to the answers! Cheers!

GillyBean

I really connected with the latter part of this chapter. Becuase the divide Jen felt from her friends as they gossiped about Damien is how I feel around my high school friends. It's as if they are still in high school and they expect to talk and be with the 'high school' me like Jen's friends did, but I stopped being that girl in yr11.

Anyway, enough of that. I really enjoyed this chapter; all of the characters you introduced felt very real to me. I can't wait to read more.

Good chapter! : )

Really good beginning. I'm already liking it. :)