I really like this one too-- I like the word "ex-implode". Your style of writing is very punchy... Keep writing.

"a clawing, screaming vacuum
ex-imploded"--That line has such force, and such originality.

I adore this. It makes absolutely no sense and perfect sense all at once.

I have to say I don't quite understand it. Could you explain it, if you want to of course. But I enjoyed reading it.

This is over my head, man, but to be honest, I'd have to think about it more. It is sad; there is so much on fictionpress that nobody actually reads poems like they should be read, over and over. I'm sorry.

I have no idea what this means, but it's fun to think about. Great selection of words!