I like how human you've made John Brown in this chapter. Every time I here about him, he doesn't sound like a good person. The little nuances of history are good too, like women not being allowed to know what men talk about because we need to take naps all throughout the day!

You wrote this pretty well.

Aw, Salmon, I love him already. Update this chica, you had better.

I really enjoyed the start of this. I hope you'll keep this up.