Oh my god...I was pretty much crying throughout this piece. I can't believe it! It was so powerful and strong...great job. :)

ah. sad.
this is like the back story of the song, face down. i always wondered... and now i got it.

hhmm. its funny cos i was looking at your fanfic site and somehow i happened upon this.

its really good. terribly sound. written with such an innocence that is just adorable (is that the rite word?).

anywho;; keep writing.
this is amazing.

there is a book by Sarah Dessen called Dreamland (i think) that has this sort of plotline, too. Its really great. Read it, if you like.

Liz

oh my...the ending was so depressing and sad... I was practically yelling at my computer as if she could hear me, trying to tell her to tell her parents or something. Why didn't she stop going out with this guy?! I guess it's just hard to get over someone you really like... But Anyways, I loved reading this! Good job.

Really well written, i like the twist at the end, update soon.

Wow...this was one hell of a oneshot...too bad it didn't last longer, well at least she escapes in some form though if I were in that kind of situation I would have fought back...be it pointless or not. :) Great story!

Wow. That was very powerful. Especially the line, "Tonight will be the night my boyfriend kills me." You wrote this very well, even if it went a little fast.
The only thing which stuck out as not fitting was the part where she said, "Well, I have to meet Alex in a few minutes at a club. Guess I better get ready." It's in the present tense, yet she's just been talking in the past, and then goes on to talk in the past again.
That's the only thing which stuck out. Overall, your story was very good, and to the point. I can't really understand why girls wouldn't tell anyone that they were being abused. Though, there is the "love" issue. People can do some pretty strange things when they're in love.
I'll check out your other stuff sometime soon. This was pretty good, though!

DUDE!! IS THIS A TRUE STORY OR SOMETHING?? did you base it on someone because JESUS FREAKIN' CHRIST! i mean it's a good story a REALLY good story but HOLY @%^#$% i mean i don't even know what 2 say!! he freakin KILLS HER!?!?!??!? anyway. well yeah um yeah i REALLY like ur story but it just surprised me at ya know the end. well then...
-amanda