That was so good! I love how you alluded to the ways you could 'solve' your problems ('metal friend' and whatnot), and never said anything directly. It adds another demension to the poem. It was wonderfully long, with every line bringing something new to the poem. You did a great job with this.

wow, i dont think its the best you've ever written but its still good and really powerful. some interesting metaphors in there too, great job!