I think the symbolism in this poem is very meaningful, and very touching.

The sad thing is that i think i would have enjoyed this if it weren't for the spelling.

I mean COME ON! It's like you weren't even trying. TXT TLK is not meant for poetry or writing like this! Spelling may not seem like an important thing but it can make or break a whole poem when it gets this distracting. It turns readers off.

You can go ahead and disregard my advice, but I'll just say it anyways: all it takes is a little extra time to go over and put things back in english. IM speak is not a language, and in fact I think it actually takes more effort to butcher most of the words than it would take to just write them. The severity of the spelling is hindring what could have been such a great piece. The idea behind it is interesting, but when things get to the point that someone has to re-read the thing ten times until they finally inderstand whats trying to be said, it's so much easier to just fix it up.

I'm sorry if that sounded a little harsh and I doubt anyone likes to have to read long criticisms, but I hate to see talent ruined just because of an issue that can be fixed so easily.

LOL.

thx 4 de reveiw!11!!1

newayz dont listn 2 dat othr person cuz dis poem is lyk amazing srsly i lyk how u used metafours or wuteva dere called lol neway i hope ur bf tim doeznt brake up w/ u :( :`(

I'm sorry, but I don't really think this is a poem at all. This is more like a very poorly written paragraph. I think you should take the time to breathe, learn how to spell properly, and seriously work on this. The emotions you are feeling could help you turn this...this ghastly run on sentence into something great. Please consider this.