great story. One shot~ it just fits.

this is excellent though you should probably leave it a 'one shot' thing. lol really great little story. i loved it :D

-LT-

Honestly i like it as a one shot. To leanthen it would lose the feeling it has... erno just my opinion.

Love this oneshot!

Wow, that was really good. I could rea;;y identify with the girl. I like it a oneshot, but if you could find a way to make it longer, I'd gladly read it.

Update, please?

Love it!

that was so sweet and incredibly sad. but thats a compliment! i wanted to cry. almost did. anyway, i really love your writing.

EEP! Sad...well written and absolutely heartbreaking. I think it was good as a one-shot and I'm about to see if you have any stories because I really liked that one.