RHP:i think that was really good
and when i read the part about how jak had changed alot i said out loud ~no kiddin'~ which caused my mom, who was walking by to stop and stare at me like i was insane because i was talking to the computer
wow...i talk to much
(Mahhaha..*cough*ha*hack* i get the first review cookie!)
ps~i love your fan art..i wish i could draw as good as you :(

Dark Jak: oh for the love of the precusors, SHUT UP ALREADY!
you've wrote a whole friggin' paragraph just write a story