|Reviews for A Lake|
| Twilight Starr 10/1/07 . chapter 1
| shookierewrites 6/25/07 . chapter 1
I noticed that you use a contradicting phrase, not nessicarily a paradox or an oxymoron.
"silver as ivory" although i can see the thought behind said statement, I cant help but think that it is awkward to the poem's flow, not to mention the meanings dont quite match up. Ivory is a bright white bone of an elephant, as to where silver is a shinging grey... like i said it interrupts the flow. Other than that, quite a lovely poem