I am in love with your writing. It is great and wonderful and fantastic and beautiful. Please write some more. I will comment and in more depth later. *heart*

Lady Alera Van Hexis
Queen Regent of Darkness and Lust

Hi! I like this story. It's a tad open-ended right now, but I'm assuming that there will be more to come, yes? I like your description - it's simple, but imaginative nonetheless. Some of your sentences are a bit run on-y and could use some polishing. Other than that, your words have a refreshing clarity to them.

Good job, and keep writing! :)

good story. keep writing