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Ashelin 2007-06-06 . chapter 1
Some of this was a little confusing, but the ending was just heartbreaking.

"Occasionally mouthing her thoughts silently
Her lips would twitch just slightly
Just like a scratched CD plays in your ears
Tears welling up in the corners of her eyes"

That was my favorite part of the whole thing. I loved description langauge though, images created from words. It was very lovely. I also liked the emotions you portrayed. You did a good job. Keep it up.
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