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I liked this chapter a lot.
By the way, cliffhangers are good. They leave readers hungry for more.
I found it a bit strange(and humorous) that you would compare a dog-like creature to a cat...ha ha
Nice work :)

Hi. I just began reading your work, and I can't deny that it's really pretty good! :D
I found chapters 1-3 really slow going. It could have actually been merged into one single chapter.
Your writing is really detailed and descriptive and AWESOME. But sometimes you put in details that might be unneccessary. Take the introduction of the old man for example. It didn't feel very important. If it does play a part in the plot, make it more obvious to the reader.
Really poetic writing that I love, with a lot of similes, metaphors and personifications. Keep it up and happy writing!
Oh and great characterization too! ^^

"the moment only lasted as long as the lighting decided."

I just started reading, but I honestly had to interrupt myself to compliment that line. It's ** brilliant. I even read it out loud to my sister XD and she just said "Wow, that's amazing" o.O Kudos. I'm definately going to keep reading, you're style flows so well =]

No. Kaitie likes this story *evil grin* but but but..that was soo sad, I liked Soun. Snuffles. Coals just a big jerk, I hope he gets nicer, please tell me he does cuz if he stays the main character and hes that much of a jerk...I KILLS HIM! Growl. Ok, I go now, and you must send this to me in some kind of email so I can do my thang and edit it cuz there's no such thins as a "silvered hair being" rofl. Okay, see ya, well now cuz ur here in yearbook but yeah. Luv ya!! Kaitie

Aww that was a great and sweet ending! The story was amazing, through and through ^_^. I'll miss it though *sniff*. It was a great read though! One of my favorites ever. And this is the 2nd story I've ever completed reading from front to finish on FP ^^.

Well, as a writer and a reader, I'll try to give a properly constructed review this time. -snicker- (something less hyper hehe) You know my thoughts concerning the chapter (amazing, brilliantly written) now for the overall story as a whole! (Exciting, huh? ^^)

To begin with, the characters are love-able almost instantaneously. Immediately after getting to know them, you never want anything to happen; and when it does, your heart is pounding and eyes welling, screaming "NO!" (I still get tear jerkers when thinking of poor Crail *sniff*) but yet it keeps the reader clinging, wanting to read further.

The adventures were profound and abundant; the friendship amazing and scenery written enchantingly. Overall, one of my absolute favorite reads in a long time!

If there is a second book, or if you plan out a trilogy for this, I'll be eagerly waiting for it. ^__^.

After all... Coal's demon was hinted as one of the strongest... makes one curious ^__^.

OK, this is an enormous review o.o! Hope it doesn't pop your eyes out reading buahahhaa! I'll miss getting updates for this, and it was so fun reading, that I'll have to read it again ^__^! Good luck with editing and take your time (I know so well how long it can take... having spent so much time on editing myself ^^;). If you ever publish this, let me know! I'll be the first to buy! ^__^

Farewell BWWD *hugs Coal, Daemyn, Soun, Aralyn, Rey, Crail, Gane, Dirahu and Aiedial*!

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FoxyWriter

aw *cries* I'm so happy because it's such a happy chapter, but also so sad because it's coming to its grand finale. *sniff*

It's wonderful though - definitely one of the best stories I've read on fp! Eep I smiled from ear to ear and my eyes welled up when meeting Crail's family!! It's not too sappy at all; the speech, the descriptions, the varied vocabulary - just everything was absolutely wonderful! There were a few errors with commas, but only like 2 that I noticed; which is a huge improvement!

I can't wait - but at the same time a little nervous (because it'll be the end T_T) - to read the final chapter of Becoming What Was Desired!

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FoxyWriter

I've been away from here too long--I've been missing out on a wonderful story =) I just caught up with Chapter Three. I'm still loving the strong friendship between Soun and Coal--though I'm inclined to side with Soun...I suspect that Coal can use a healthy dose of his caution!

yum! *takes chocolate egg* ^_^

Happy easter and holidays as well :D

This was a great chapter! The scenes were great; I'm a little sleepy so I might've missed a detail or two, but overall, I could follow it pretty good. :D I wonder, when this is finished, will there be a second? o.o that'd be cool xD

Soun's reactions and demeanor is great too! It's very believable and adds to his character. Love this chapter ^__^

Can't wait for the next one!

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FoxyWriter

yayay! new chappie ^__^! I can smell tension in the air O.O I wonder if Soun will warm up to the demons, or if there'll be a fight between them :S hope not... eek! can't wait for the next chapter!!

Great chapter here! As always, the description is wonderfully well done and there were only a few minor punctuation problems (like, 2) - really good!! :D Great work,and can't wait for the next one!! ^__^

~FoxyWriter

ITS BEEN 7 DAYS!?!?!!? WHERE WAS I! *bangs head continuously against keyboard* >_

I rather enjoyed this chapter and I can't wait to read the rest. I think that this (so far) has been written brilliantly, my favorite part was the beginning. Until my next review, I bid you adieu.

omg I'm crying T__T *hugs Crail* T_T I loved him :*(

lol I love al the characters... you've done so well at making them so loveable that now T__T Poor Crail! :((

Well written...sad...chapter... I suppose it did have to happen... it's obvious Coal hadn't the heart to kill, so that was good - and the reactions were very VERY (almost TOO) real T__T I do wonder what will happen now... agh... the celtic song I'm listening too, called "The Soft Goodbye" only intensifies the sadness of this chappy...

There should be a heroic tribute to little Crail T_T

update soon! I have to know what will happen next!!

~FoxyWriter

aww thanks (hugs) xD

Yay ^__^ I'm so happy! Most the stories I'm reading, I'm up-to-date on and no one updates for a long time lol Was really nice to see the gang of demons (and Crail) again xD Crail's so cute too! Crail and Rey that is xD

Anyway, I love the character development with Coal, and I'm still really interested in what's going to become of him in the end - and if he'd actually kill a child (which is sad) and if Soun actually will be brought back or not. Agh! So many curiosities O.O

Overall, great chappie, very enjoyable to read - and wonderful descriptions :D Update soon!

~FoxyWriter

wee another chapter! ^_^ I got the notice earlier, but unfortunately I was wrapped up in painting that I hadn't the time T__T but now that it's 3 am and I'm dead tired, I decided to read it! lol! xD I always love reading your chapters, fillers or not; the characters are too amusing to NOT enjoy them xD

a few punctuation errors was all I noticed, but I'm much too sleepy to point them out (sorry) but I loved this chapter ^_^ and no way, these chappies haven't been boring at all! (especially the last few - they've added to the plot a lot...and that rhymed!)

This is more or less a "bonding" chapter - the gang needed a rest, so there they took it - and a couple got time to smooch even! Rey and Crail are absolutely hilarious (and adorable ^__^) I love their interaction with each other - the fights, the arguments haha - never fails to amuse me! :D I love Coal too XD

and dang the more I read, the more I want to paint a picture for it (your descriptions are just wonderful) - but I'm so wrapped up in other drawings (previous promises and testing stuff, etc) that I haven't time T__T not to mention GED practice x_x it's kind of like the exams, only this test will mark my graduation of high (since I'm homeschooled). So...yeah x_x I'm just happy I still find time to review my favorite stories!! ^__^!

Update soon & good luck on the exams! :D

~FoxyWriter