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| Twilight Starr 2007-11-10 ch 1,  | abuseGreat poem. My favorite line was "this is my bitter lullaby of imperfect melodies and fractured dreams". Nice work. ~Twilight Starr~ |
| spiderfly 2007-08-28 ch 1, | abuseDripping with gorgeous imagery. This is really good. I think that personally, I would prefer some more punctuation, to break up the endless flowing of one line into another - or just a couple of full stops here and there. But maybe the way it just seams on and continues is what gives it its charm. |
| mizu no kokoro 2007-07-31 ch 1, | abusethe sickle moon. such an elegant way to portray death keep writing |
| Three Cheers for Eve 2007-07-06 ch 1, | abuseI know, I know, break out the tambourines and drums; the great slumbering review beast that is Anna has at long last, awoken. But, hey, I'm back! First of all, I have to say the idea of texture in this poem really fascinated me. You use verbs like "woven" and "splinter"; two words that present contrasting images. This poem takes me from image to image in my mind very smoothly, which I adored. Now on to the next review! (Though I warn you; I am not a bulk reviewer!) |
| Kissing Concrete 2007-06-14 ch 1, | abuseWOW. that is honestly all i have to say. but i will say more: i loved your use of the common nursery rhyme and the vocabulary is amazing. the way the words are woven together is truely original. i haven't read anything like it. KEEP WRITING!! |
| Risa Shayde 2007-06-12 ch 1, | abuseOuch. Julia, this is honestly depressing. And actually, this is how I always pictured that nursery rhyme. (Which is why it always made me cry when I was younger.) But I'm curious now. Who is the baby? ~Risa Shayde |