Kyaa!! You found it!! I'm so happy for chu ^_^ Great poem, love. MUY romantico O_o "Crash my mouth upon yours" ...It gives the image of waves crashing against rocks in the background of a picture of two *people* kissing. =] Great job =^_^=

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I liked that a lot.

what an ... interesting concept. I must admit, I enjoyed the idea of love being M&Ms, and your idea of the blue and red making purple was intriguing.

Just a few points [because you asked for them]:

You shouldn't really have to use bold and brackets in poems. They draw attention away from the rest of your writing and are a bit like cheating - your poems should accentuate themselves without you needing bold to do it for you. Likewise, experiment with punctuation. Add semicolons, dashes, incomplete phrases, fragmented sentences! Make more use of line breaks and be creative - this isn't an english lesson!

*you're, not your ^_^

You should have added in a line break on the line beginning "just to keep my feeble light ...", the sentence is too long and breaks the flow of the poem.

I liked the poem a lot. It captured the whole protecting of the other lover type thing. If you have ever heard of a two voice poem, it sounds like you were trying to do that. It's a poem intended to be read by two people. But very good nonetheless.

cool poem.. it strikes me as something very romantic, considering the fact that its about chocolate (at first).. i liked it.. nice job..

btw, im inlove with chocolates!