 Basara 2007-06-12 . chapter 1the thoughts of a despaired person hiding in a facade by daylight... yes, a misery even if it's not that literal death itself...
oh, the sweet grace of darkness itself...
nice! |
 Definition 2007-06-09 . chapter 1The last line is perfect. Nice job! |
 Katja de Wit 2007-06-09 . chapter 1Wow, that's quite...wow. :)
~Katja |
 a silenced revolution 2007-06-08 . chapter 1Certainly is dark. I rather like it, and the ending goes perfectly with the other two lines. |
 Charlotte Makepeace 2007-06-08 . chapter 1I love it. I can't say anything more, i'm afraid. It's rather hard to comment on a haiku! Anyway, i like the imagery it carries very much. |
 Anthony C. M. Thomas 2007-06-08 . chapter 1Very very nice. I love the rhythm the first line has. Amazing work. This is being favorited. |
 Rapture Whispers 2007-06-08 . chapter 1Very nice. It starts off dark and depressing and then ends sort of like the lines of a child's book, so peaceful and innocent. It's wonderful! Continue! |