Oh! I like this a lot! I had seen it, but I wasn't sure if it was the type of thing that you had be done reading Timekeeper's chosen to read...I think you know what I mean. This really should be put into your story, and not just a one chapter deal. This is really interesting, because most of the time, we don't get to see what's truly going on in the timekeeper's minds. I loved this.

Ooh! Depth for your story! I really like this! You shouldn't confine this to it's own little thing on FP - you should integrate this somewhere into Timekeeper's Chosen, because the more depth you give your characters, the more likeable and understandable they are. It's true that readers should always dislike the antagonist, but he shouldn't be a flat character in any way! This is a really good piece that you should use in your story!