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dragonflydreamer 2008-10-19 . chapter 7
Wow. I really like this one. It leaves so much unsaid and so much for the reader to fill in with their own experiences.

I also like the progression of your ideas because your meaning unfolded as you went along.

~Sparkle from the Review Marathon (link in profile)
dragonflydreamer 2008-10-19 . chapter 6
I like how each line is its own sentence. It reminds me of thoughts coming to the person as this is happening.

I also like the last line because it leaves the reader with the pleading feeling.
dragonflydreamer 2008-10-19 . chapter 5
I like your idea here. Quite common in poetry, but it's interestingly expressed.

I don't particularly like the phrasing of the last line. It almost seems like it means the person themself is diverse, not diverse as opposed to other people.
dragonflydreamer 2008-10-19 . chapter 4
Again, I like the simplicity of this. It leaves a lot up for interpretation;

I also like your tone because it sounds informal and sarcastic.
dragonflydreamer 2008-10-19 . chapter 3
I like your idea here. It's something you see in a lot of fiction on this site, but I think it's rather creative for poetry.

I also like how open this is because it leaves a lot up to the interpretation of the reader.
dragonflydreamer 2008-10-19 . chapter 2
I like the alliteration throughout this because of the irony it creates.

Sorry, this is a little nitpicky, but I don't like the punctuation in this because I don't think it's grammatically correct. Maybe look it over?
dragonflydreamer 2008-10-19 . chapter 1
I like the alliteraton at the beginning because it's a good attention grabber, and the phrase itself was interesting.

I also like the last line. It reminds me of a song I did in chorus and that makes me happy :)

~Sparkles from the Review Marathon (link in profile)
Toxik Purity 2008-08-04 . chapter 3
I really like Misinterpretation, because love and hate are really very close, and you tell a story with very little words.
AuraBorealis 2007-11-08 . chapter 50
lol. nice work.
AuraBorealis 2007-11-08 . chapter 49
hallalloua
you are finally writing this again. thank you and very good work
AuraBorealis 2007-07-22 . chapter 47
that is the story of today. no more prince in shinning armor
AuraBorealis 2007-07-22 . chapter 46
lol. that is quite insane
AuraBorealis 2007-07-22 . chapter 41
lol. confusion like that often hapens
AuraBorealis 2007-07-08 . chapter 33
what does gratifacion mean. does it mean to be pleased or something. it seems like it.
good work
AuraBorealis 2007-07-08 . chapter 32
true. but is there really chamange
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