 dragonflydreamer 2008-10-19 . chapter 7Wow. I really like this one. It leaves so much unsaid and so much for the reader to fill in with their own experiences.
I also like the progression of your ideas because your meaning unfolded as you went along.
~Sparkle from the Review Marathon (link in profile) |
 dragonflydreamer 2008-10-19 . chapter 6I like how each line is its own sentence. It reminds me of thoughts coming to the person as this is happening.
I also like the last line because it leaves the reader with the pleading feeling. |
 dragonflydreamer 2008-10-19 . chapter 5I like your idea here. Quite common in poetry, but it's interestingly expressed.
I don't particularly like the phrasing of the last line. It almost seems like it means the person themself is diverse, not diverse as opposed to other people. |
 dragonflydreamer 2008-10-19 . chapter 4Again, I like the simplicity of this. It leaves a lot up for interpretation;
I also like your tone because it sounds informal and sarcastic. |
 dragonflydreamer 2008-10-19 . chapter 3I like your idea here. It's something you see in a lot of fiction on this site, but I think it's rather creative for poetry.
I also like how open this is because it leaves a lot up to the interpretation of the reader. |
 dragonflydreamer 2008-10-19 . chapter 2I like the alliteration throughout this because of the irony it creates.
Sorry, this is a little nitpicky, but I don't like the punctuation in this because I don't think it's grammatically correct. Maybe look it over? |
 dragonflydreamer 2008-10-19 . chapter 1I like the alliteraton at the beginning because it's a good attention grabber, and the phrase itself was interesting.
I also like the last line. It reminds me of a song I did in chorus and that makes me happy :)
~Sparkles from the Review Marathon (link in profile) |
 Toxik Purity 2008-08-04 . chapter 3I really like Misinterpretation, because love and hate are really very close, and you tell a story with very little words. |
 AuraBorealis 2007-11-08 . chapter 50lol. nice work. |
 AuraBorealis 2007-11-08 . chapter 49hallalloua
you are finally writing this again. thank you and very good work |
 AuraBorealis 2007-07-22 . chapter 47that is the story of today. no more prince in shinning armor |
 AuraBorealis 2007-07-22 . chapter 46lol. that is quite insane |
 AuraBorealis 2007-07-22 . chapter 41lol. confusion like that often hapens |
 AuraBorealis 2007-07-08 . chapter 33what does gratifacion mean. does it mean to be pleased or something. it seems like it.
good work |
 AuraBorealis 2007-07-08 . chapter 32true. but is there really chamange |