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Susurrus 2007-06-14 . chapter 1
you use the perfect words to describe the sea; things like 'beating, brew, ebb, shell,' and 'swell' especially, etc etc... and the idea of the pearl is an excellent way to wrap it up. very well done, a pleasant and interesting poem ^^

~Susurrus
Miriel Randir 2007-06-11 . chapter 1
ah, what a rhyme scheme!
danceintherainxo 2007-06-10 . chapter 1
i really like your idea and the imagery is really well done!
theres just a few problems with the rhyme scheme/sonnet form.
lines 1&3, 5&7 dont rhyme 1&3 dont rhyme at all and 5& 7 is a near rhyme...
along with fingers and linger-i dont know if that would work
plus, you're missing your rhyming couplet
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