|Reviews for I am|
| Night Silver's whisper 6/10/07 . chapter 1
Gosh, your talent is so wonderful. Some of those lines just stopped me in my tracks as I read. It has such a beautiful flow to it, and a special grace that isn't easy to aquire.
On with the show!
Night Silver's Whisper
| Dorkazoid 6/10/07 . chapter 1
A very moving peice of literature with good use of literary devices.
The title could be something more in the theme of the mountain, as it is repeated throughout.
Only critisism would be on the line:
"I wonder how it will be before I crumble; fall to my knees"
You could maybe put:
"I wonder how it will be before I crumble; fall to my depths"
Showing how you are still a mountain, and keeping in the the personification of the mountain.
Good use of personification.
Keep on writing.
Please be kind enough to have a brief look at my poetry. Thank you.