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lieutenant razor 2007-09-03 . chapter 1
Ohh, so sad! I loved it though. I think my favorite part was "I promise you can tell me the truth" and then you said "To tell you the truth." Like you're not asking anything more of him than you're willing to give. I dunno, it jumped out at me, and I really liked it.

Your use of repitition really strengthened your images, creating a beautiful, strong piece. Beautiful.
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